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宛儿姑娘,“听不厌”句确实与词意不是很协,不过改后的”听不惯“老纪也觉得不是很好,过于直白生硬了,没了婉约词风的味道。老纪建议改作:“听不得”如何?这样既符合词的意境又对后句“敲窗雨”句的衔接起了缓冲
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